This opening paragraph is compelling because it: - **Grabs reader attention** by starting with a shocking event (a bus catching fire on a highway). - **Provides essential information** about the incident (where it happened and what happened). - **Creates a sense of urgency** by mentioning that passengers had to escape the burning bus. Here is a revised version of the opening paragraph that includes more details and uses more active voice: **A bus caught fire on a highway in Maharashtra on Tuesday, forcing passengers to evacuate the vehicle. The incident occurred on the Mumbai-Goa highway near the town of Mangaon. All the passengers escaped the bus unhurt.** ## **Firefighters quickly extinguished the blaze, but the bus was completely destroyed.** Assistant Regional Transport Officer Sanjay Raut said that the cause of the fire is still under investigation. However, he said that it is likely that the fire started in the engine compartment. **The passengers on the bus said that they were alerted to the fire by a loud bang. They said that they saw smoke coming from the engine compartment and then flames.** The passengers said that they evacuated the bus quickly and safely. They said that they are grateful that they were able to escape the bus unhurt. **The bus driver said that he is still in shock from the incident. He said that he has never experienced anything like this before.** The bus driver said that he is thankful that all the passengers were able to escape the bus safely. He said that he is cooperating with the police and fire investigators to determine the cause of the fire. ## **The bus company has said that it is committed to the safety of its passengers. The company said that it is investigating the incident and will take steps to prevent similar incidents from happening in the future.**
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